CHAPTER: 1 The Puppy

One day Kai was walking down the street and he saw a small puppy... He walked over to it and said, "Oh... you sooo cuteee. Will you come with me?" The small puppy gently stood up and rubbed against Kai's leg... Kai said, " You look you havent eaten in days..." Kai reaches into his back pocket and grabs his Lunch. "Its sorta squished but... its all ive got for now..." The puppy ate it very slowly. Kai sat down next to it and Was happy. The puppy was also happy. He needed something to love... After the puppy finished the sandwitch Kai picked up the puppy and headed home.

CHAPTER: 2 Friends

Once Kai got home he tryed to find the puppy something to eat... He started to worry because he couldnt find anything. He glanced at the puppy and said, "Im sorry doggy... I dont have much..." The dog just layed down. Kai started to look for some money... He thaught to himself, "Ill get some dog food... I hope he likes that..." He searched his whole house and found $13.17. Kai said, "I hope this is enough..." He got his backpack and headed to the store. He found a good sized bag at the store for only $12.95. "Uhm... Could i get some help with this?" He said to the people around him. A strong man with a small child resting on his shoulder said with his deep voice, "Humphh..." and he grabbed the bag with one hand, "whare do you need it?". Kai said, "Oh thank you so much... To the register... Please...". Kai was scared of this man... He was picked on and beaten on alot in his younger years... He wouldnt want this guy beating him. After the man got the bag there the little girl said, "Bye bye misterrrr". Kai looked down at the ground and played with his fingers... The man looked at him and said, "Whats the matter?" Kai looked up and said, "Well... Now that i got the bag... ive gotta take it 6 blocks to my house..." The man looked red for a minute... Than a tear roled down his face and he shouted, "I will cary it for you!!" Kai started crying... He was a very helpful man... When he go home he went to the dog and patted its half bald head. "Here you go puppy..." Kai got a bowl from the coubord and layed in infront of the dog. The dog dug right in to it! The man said, "Well i better take Lina home now..." Kai replyed, "Yea..." The man held out his hand and there was a small card with bold letters that read, 555-6785. Kai started crying again... Than asked, "Whats you name?" The man replyed, "Burt". Kai was happy and smiled that Burt had came along...

why is chapter 2 like....4 times the size of chapter 1 >.> chapter 1 is suppose to be the introductions so it is usually long >.> and you might want to start working on your spelling...the story is good but it's kind of slow moving...I give a 6/10

It isnt done yet... =(

yeah I know it's not done yet <.< but just the chapters aren't really that catchy...the first few chapters of a story are suppose to draw the reader into it and make them wanna finish...this story doesn't reall have that yet...right now it's just basically wondering what happens to the puppy, but yet not really caring...

Yea i suck...

I never said you sucked...nor would I...because at least you can write...I have a problem with even getting anything out of my head and onto the paper...you have a good idea here, I just think that you should just like make it one complete story instead of adding the chapters little by little...that way the story flows better...

Ok i am ending it! [BEWARE OF DUMB ENDING!!!!]



Kai gets ran over bye a truck...