Title: [Poem] You are my joy
Vena Cava - June 17, 2006 08:05 PM (GMT)
Please don't post stupid comments. Only post meaninful post's.
No "I don't like poems" this time, please.
| QUOTE |
You are my joy
Was your day bad?
Don’t look down,
You are still here,
Here to help me,
You make me happy.
The things I think,
When I think of you,
You make me smile,
When you are here,
I am never sad.
When you look at me,
With a funny smile,
A smile of hope,
I just have look,
And smile back.
If you go far away,
No where close to me,
I still think of you,
And when I do,
It makes me smile.
When days are sad,
No ones home,
The lights are out,
I stop,
And think of you.
You are my joy,
As I am yours,
Our happiness,
No one can change,
It is forever.
By Vena Cava |
NaotaInko - June 18, 2006 02:18 AM (GMT)
It's decent, I liked your first one better, but this isn't bad
blue_impulse - June 19, 2006 08:57 AM (GMT)
I like your first poem better but this one is alright.
Vena Cava - June 22, 2006 04:42 PM (GMT)
I'm not good at writting happy poems, lol. Sorry :S
Thome - June 22, 2006 05:49 PM (GMT)
Well, as strongly against poems as I am (you can just message me about that to learn my reasons) I think that you have good context. However it's highly lacking in any vivid appeal.
And tell me what you set the meter at, I tried snapping to it in two halves, three halves and four halves, and not one of them fit. : P
Vena Cava - June 24, 2006 11:00 AM (GMT)
Umm? What?
What meter?
:/
That made no sense...