"Ha my minions will kill you and the more you kill them the stronger they get haaaa!". "Ok my minions kill Inyuasha with everything you got". "Ahhhh! darnet". Inyuasha was getting wooped very badly and he could not take the pain and he got hit hard more and more untal he starts bleeding very badly through the mouth. Inyuasha fought more and more and didnt want to give up untal he becasme victor and he thinks that he might improve his skillz more. But if he dies you guys know that he would be avenged! "I am sick of this stufff ahhhh!!!". Inyuasha jumps up with his sword with black blood on it for the times he slaves the red eyed demon minions. Inyuasha would not give up and kept of fighting back without using his mind with a stratagie.

Inyuasha now thinks and is talking to hiself in his head. "If I keep on killing them they would come back alive so I need a good stratagie and the red eyed demon is just watch". "I am not sure what else shall I do". Inyuasha thinks fast than he sees a very shiny ruby on the floor than he picks it, than the ruby started glowing more and more than a red light came out from eat than all of the minions yelled and screamed than they disappered. Inyuasha still sees the red eyed demon through so now he is going to kil it head on without any of his tricks the red eyed demon has. "Your ass is mine Ahhh!!!" the red eyed demon than gets up and doges Inyuashas attacks very quickly. Anything that Inyuasha throws at him he am doging it with no hesitation or anything.

Inyuasha swinged his sword and tyed to hit him but than he messed everytime without even one touch ont he red eyed demon. "This is fun haha! and Inyuasha im just playing games with you and you can touch me, man you are weak. "Take that back ass*Sencored*, I will kill you one time or another.Inyuasha yelled and yelled trying to hit him with all of his powers. Than the ruby glows agian and a heavy wind came, there clothe blew and the light shined so brightly that no one could see than....


If you like this episode stay tuned for my next episode p4.

the paragraphs is good, the storyline is good, but the grammar/punctuation/spelling you need to work on a bit more =)

i reckon you should put a new line whenever someone different talks, so it's easier to read who's saying something. but yeah, you're getting better :)

A LOT BETTER! just work on the things Lim suggested and it would be almost perfect (can't say absolutely perfect because nothing can beat the original.) :) <('.'<)

you say that to me all the tiime lol



nice

Dont worry becasue ill make episode 4 next week maybe and ill work on it and do some stratagies at home.